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BY CROM!!!

Mendalla joins the august ranks of Andre Norton, Marion Zimmer Bradley, Fritz Leiber, Robert E. Howard

Now gird your loins, tighten your thews, and get ready to storm the White Ape Palace of the Lambent Flame

The stones will be stained tonight!
 
the opening of one of my fav movies. the best adaptation of his work imho
SFW
the racy stuff comes later in the movie
aaand my fav Oliver Stone movie

 
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BY CROM!!!

Mendalla joins the august ranks of Andre Norton, Marion Zimmer Bradley, Fritz Leiber, Robert E. Howard

Now gird your loins, tighten your thews, and get ready to storm the White Ape Palace of the Lambent Flame

The stones will be stained tonight!
Description of the protagonist:

"The huge man strode down the main road of Varan. His dark eyes glared as he looked around, watching for defenders. Battle Lord Jadek Prynn was taller than any of the other warriors fighting in the street. His heavyset body was a mass of muscles, scars, and tattoos. In his hand, he held Blood Thief, his long sword, at the ready."

Later, it leans more into a kind of mythical fantasy rather than straight "hero battles nastiness" S&S, though.
 
Looking at trying some actual paying markets.

I found one that might be ideal for my story "Down in the Well" and might take it down from StoriesSpace to submit it there.

And there's a Canadian company looking for material for an anthology of fiction about Bigfoot. I have always wanted to write about the mythical West Coast ape so maybe this is the time. Just need to come up with an interesting piece of fiction.

(And I have written one "Bigfoot" story but it was (a) erotica and they want SFW and (b) it is long since deleted for reasons)
 
So, yeah, not much happening. Bashing away at ideas but not really getting much out (at least that's mentionable here, I did get one new NSFW story out).

I have been wrestling with where to go with the characters I introduced in The Spirits of Tan Maldrin. Some ideas are direct, right where it left off sequels but I've always thought I wanted more of an ongoing adventures of type of series and a bit lighter in tone than the Tana stories that these are a follow-on to (One of the characters is Tana's daughter, now seventeen. Since Tana was pregnant with her in the last story, that puts about 17-18 years between them.).

However, I seem to keep flailing or deciding I'm not happy with where things are going. For instance, how much do I reference what Nalia (Tana's daughter) went through in Shadows, where a monster nearly killed her? Do I do the old Star Trek thing and largely forget it ever happened until they actually go back? Reference it as a bit of backstory or character development? Explore how it affects her fairly deeply (ie. she has PTSD)? But that would militate against the "bit lighter in tone".

Current attempt has them travelling a long distance to a far-off city-state in search of ... something. I'm not 100% sure what. An incident leads to Nalia meeting the heir to the city's Crown Prince who attempts to romance her. She's wrestling with her calling as a priestess and life in general after the events at Tan Maldrin, which complicates her handling of the Prince's wooing. And his guardian is ... something weird, maybe an embodied spirit of some kind? Which she can sense but isn't sure what it means. So, yeah, lot of ideas and moving parts and, while I am pretty happy with what's written, there's some stuff missing that's needed and I am not sure where and how to bring it all together. And to do it all justice, it might need to be a novella or short novel, in which case do I pull Shadows of Tan Maldrin down and incorporate it into the longer work?

Decisions, decisions. Sometimes the thinking is more work than the actual writing.
 
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Tossed that story aside for now. I have two stories going and am kind of dancing back and forth.

One is horror/urban fantasy about a city plagued with supernatural manifestations and a group of citizens who are trying to figure what's up (an engineer turned tech exec, a team leader from his startup, a friend of his who is a United Church minister with a science background, and a psychic witch). Think Ghostbusters minus the team of professional ghost hunters, just ordinary folks in over their heads. So maybe more Haunting of Hill House (the novel, not the TV show).

The other is about a young woman who was abandoned as a baby and went through years of foster care who discovers at 20 that she may be heir to a small fortune. A romance component is likely as well.

Both seem like they could go fairly long, which once again brings up the issue of where to publish. If these get into novella territory, I might bite the bullet and take a crack at Amazon Kindle or Smashwords self-publishing. StoriesSpace is almost useless for longer works now and I'm not sure how I would fare starting my own site on Medium or something like that.
 
Welp, with all my current efforts flailing, StoriesSpace came through with a new, and intriguing, competition. So I'm dumping my current work into my "Under Review" folder and focussing on that. 1000-5000 words, very broad theme of "It's Not What It Looks Like". Due May 25 with the announcement to follow on May 31 (just in time, since I leave on vacation on June 3).

Here's the details for anyone interested in joining the site and putting in a story:

 
You know, meditating on "It's not what it looks like" and how often I get computer issues where an error makes it look like one problem but it is actually another underlying one that is the real cause, I'm almost wondering how I can make IT support sound cool and thrilling in a story. Maybe a computer "error" that turns out to be a hack happening? Or a "hack" turns out to be something more mundane but causes serious stress finding that out? Suspenseful race to find out what is really happening before something awful happens? Hmmmm.
 
So what I thought would be a great and inspiring comp theme has led to four attempts at stories, all but the latest ending in dead ends at less than 1000 words. The new one might just go somewhere, but we shall see. I thought that about a couple of the others, too. :rolleyes: With only one story submitted so far, this comp needs some life but I also need to get things right and not rush just for the sake of moving the comp along.
 
It's unfortunate, I found school turned me off a lot of things. Book clubs come to mind, it seemed too much like the assignments we would have after reading a book for LA. Then I did a few and enjoyed them. Writing is another, maybe I will give it a try one day too. I didn't really understand the appeal of fan fics, but I have seen/read enough books/tv shows in the last 10ish years that I felt like they had an amazing premise and then I felt like they wasted a really great idea. That didn't really mean I knew where I wanted the story to go though but I guess I wouldn't know if I could get the type of result I wanted as a viewer/reader unless I tried.

@Mendalla for the competitions how do you pace the word count out? With something like an essay I can do that. With fiction - I think of books as page counts, not word counts. Assignments, I don't think I had any after jr. high and I think the constraints we had were all time, not words or pages. Poetry was a bit different.

I hope the latest one turns out into something you are satisfied with!
 
@Mendalla for the competitions how do you pace the word count out?
To a degree I don't. I sit down to write and keep going for as long as I can. If I have a strong idea that engages me and am really in the groove, I can easily do a first draft of a 2000-3000 word story in a couple hours. The problem, of course, is that I have a fulltime job and a household eating up a lot of time so realistically, for a 5000 word length like this one, I budget 2-3 days for a first draft and a couple weeks to finish something submission worthy (I nitpick my stories to death when editing). That's if I don't keep changing story like happened with this one. I have been through four partial drafts, each a totally different story, to date.

Which brings to where I am at. <2 weeks to go and I do have a finished story. Needs some more editing and refining but I hope to publish by the weekend. I am a bit stymied about what to do for a cover image, though. I am trying to go back to using stock images rather than AI but my resolve on that point is wavering right now. I just can't figure out what to use that can be found as stock vs. writing up a prompt for something more specific to the story. It's set at a wedding ceremony and reception (mostly) so I've been looking at pictures of halls decorated for such events. I try not to use people, at least not individuals, since finding someone who fits what I describe in the story can be a serious challenge.
 
To a degree I don't. I sit down to write and keep going for as long as I can. If I have a strong idea that engages me and am really in the groove, I can easily do a first draft of a 2000-3000 word story in a couple hours. The problem, of course, is that I have a fulltime job and a household eating up a lot of time so realistically, for a 5000 word length like this one, I budget 2-3 days for a first draft and a couple weeks to finish something submission worthy (I nitpick my stories to death when editing). That's if I don't keep changing story like happened with this one. I have been through four partial drafts, each a totally different story, to date.

Which brings to where I am at. <2 weeks to go and I do have a finished story. Needs some more editing and refining but I hope to publish by the weekend. I am a bit stymied about what to do for a cover image, though. I am trying to go back to using stock images rather than AI but my resolve on that point is wavering right now. I just can't figure out what to use that can be found as stock vs. writing up a prompt for something more specific to the story. It's set at a wedding ceremony and reception (mostly) so I've been looking at pictures of halls decorated for such events. I try not to use people, at least not individuals, since finding someone who fits what I describe in the story can be a serious challenge.

Is a fixed story thus an instituted myth ... due to shift and creep ... secular rheid! In continental drift ... fecundity? Still motive ... it goes on like Trump's virtue ... stretched! Anxiety Rae intercourse at high levels??? It branches off the tree of Sophia ... Y's demo ... temporal ... cause the rigid will not have it ... defines pious! Carved in stone???? It blows through dark and unseen domains ... that's Earth or the Mire thing ... Mire Maid as Marah (an eastern word for a vessel) ...

Gode grief Charles ... then the question of the fluid Ð ... t' Ꜿ ... when the light reverses? Nacht fall ... knoc kout? Light soude? Shadow stretches ... the under bed effect ... monsters ... Chimera? The jokes about this blinding domina are legend ... but not a Mina concern!
 
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So with my comp entry "Plus One" up, I have turned, or more correctly returned, to a long standing project. One of my first stories on StoriesSpace was a fantasy adventure called "Night of the Wind" and I always intended to write a series about the characters and setting. So, I am taking a crack at the story I have long intended as the next of those tales.

The following is from a "blog" post on my profile on StoriesSpace discussing the birth of the town of Avenigar and the trio of characters who are the protagonists of the stories set there.

Mendalla said:
Many years ago, I had an idea for a setting. It would be a smallish town in a remote area that existed for one main reason: So I had a place to set D&D adventures. No, not really. It existed as a kind of waystation for travellers passing through the nearby mountains en route to and from places beyond them. Mostly this would be caravans of traders with accompanying drivers (folks to drive the horsedrawn wagons since this is a quasi-medieval world), guards, and such. They paused in town to restock provisions and generally prepare themselves for the difficult trip through the mountain passes. This meant the town went from a rather small place with maybe a hundred or so people in the off-season (late Fall through early Spring) to a few hundred in the "caravan season" as merchants and other temporary residents moved in to service the caravans. Individual travellers might also pass through and, more importantly, weird crap would happen in the region that would attract parties of adventurers.

Problem was, I wasn't playing those games anymore and it was more an exercise for my imagination. So, I repurposed it as a setting for fantasy stories. Given it was remote and kind of on the frontier of its world, I could even give things a bit of a Western flair, with the main protagonist being the town's "Sheriff", which I eventually changed into a "Warden" who commands a town guard of mostly local militia. This character, Dev Jackylbury, was also a veteran of a recent major war, which let me explore the land's history a bit. I ended up building a whole world around this setting, but so far, beyond a few references to Dev's war years and consequent travels, I haven't told any stories outside Avenigar, the town I just described.

Needing some people for Dev to play off of, I added a couple more characters. Jaira is his deputy warden, a skilled leader and officer but lacking Dev's war experience. And Niomi Shen is priestess of the local temple and has a backstory connection to Dev, who first met her during the war. She's also part of the order of the goddess of the moon and magic, allowing her to learn and use this world's form of magic. A mage/cleric hybrid and a pair of fighters isn't necessarily an ideal D&D party, but for a story it's more their personalities that matter than their character niches. And I rather like them.

Sadly, I only ever got one story finished in Avenigar before moving on to other writings. That would be Night of the Wind, in which a mysterious traveller brings a calamity down on the town during its Winter Solstice/New Year's festivities (yes, it is arguably a Christmas story ). Dev, Niomi, and Jaira have to deal with the events as a powerful blizzard rages around them.
 
I'm shifting more focus on to the character of Niomi this time. She was a bit of a supporting character in Night of the Wind, providing magical support and other aid to Dev, who was kind of the main protagonist. And since she is a priestess of the world's religion, I get to explore that a bit. It's kind of a dualist thing with a dominant Goddess (Earth) and a major God (Sun/Sky) who is her consort. Their children then have roles beneath them as lesser deities governing specific domains. Niomi belongs to the Sisters of Denytha, who is the eldest daughter of the Earth and Sky and rules the moon, night, and magic. This makes Niomi something of a witch (and that is an informal, colloquial term for the Sisters which other characters sometimes use) and able to use magical abilities, hence her role in the first story. I'm setting up a mystery around the temple and why this particular one is attended by her sect. Already spent some verbiage developing her priestess role a bit more, like her performing daily rituals in the temple.

Not sure I'll get much more done on the new story, but I've set up the situation and got my three main characters involved. 3900ish words already so this is likely to be a longer, maybe multipart, story. What I have now would be the first chapter if I do this as a novella/novel.

We are supposed to get the results from the competition tomorrow.
 
Went back to a writing project from a few weeks (months?) back. Started reading through what I had written, doing some light editing along the way. And then the whole thing just screeched to a halt. I realized that I had a whack of inconsistencies in a fairly key plot point between when it is introduced in chapter one and when it comes into play in chapters.

To run it through quickly:
  • An young woman raised in foster care, now twenty, is approached by lawyer saying she has an inheritance from the mother who abandoned her as a baby.
  • Her mother had eventually married a wealthy businessman and had success in business herself. She also had another child with her husband. All family members have died in a plane crash, hence the inheritance.
  • The inheritance includes a house that the mother inherited from her own father. It is explicitly not the family home, but a property owned on the side by the mother.
  • Given it came from the protagonist's grandfather, I had it pegged as built in the 1940s or 50s.
  • But then when she goes to inspect the house before the lawyer takes it all to probate, I describe it as being a recently built, quite modern house that was the family residence. Whoops.
  • I also realized that I have to explain at some point why the mother kept the inherited house even though they had a family home
No real spoilers there, by the way. This is all the beginning of the story and the plot takes off from this point if I go the way I planned. But right now, I'm kind of hung up on how to handle this element. The home element matters down the road so I can't just jettison it.

This is why I really need to start keeping better notes on my longer stories, I guess.
 
New competition on StoriesSpace and this times, it is poetry. Theme is, rather appropos for this site, "Beyond the Veil" described as "in a mysterious or hidden place or state, especially the unknown state of existence after death." Though, obviously, it is not limited to the afterlife. The realm of spirits, demons, and so on is also often described in terms of being hidden by a veil. Here's the link. I am contemplating what to do with it:

 
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